I need to be critiqued on my percussion parts to this song, and pretty much all the other parts, except the brass parts, which I got pretty good i think.

Tell me how my drum part could be changed. The tenor and snare especially. I haven't done the cymbal parts yet, but I'm sure they would... suck.

edit- it comes from a college band: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Do7v1xzCGpI

I cant seem to get the attachment to work.

it worked for me, but I'll post em individually.

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Just for the record, that mellophone part is unplayable unless you happen to have the Star '91 mello-line hiding in your pocket (and even then, have you ever heard the notes above a high C on mello? Even with an amazing player they're nasty). :-p

I'd probably go back and fix all those sets of upbeats where the middle eighths are tied. That's correct in certain circumstances, but as it stands, they're mostly just hard on the eyes and would be better served as quarters between the eighths. I'd also contemplate changing the A Sax part so it's not in such a challenging tessitura for the entire song (much like the mello part, only it's more playable since it's a reed).

The mp3 file does not work for me.

I completely agree about changing the alto sax part. You are in the upper register for the whole piece, and that can get tiresome on the lips.

The clarinet part is fine. Nothing too wierd there.

Once the mp3 is working I will comment on how the drum parts fit. Just glancing, it seems really really repetitive, which gets boring on the player.

wow. they all work for me, but ok here is another 1. I changed tha alto and mellowphone to be an octave lower. Watch the youtube video. thats where I got it.

Not sure if you were trying to transcribe the parts from the video or just write something similar. All those bass unisons while the the snares are clicking and the tenors play quarter notes are played as upbeats in that video, you have them written as downbeats. I think the upbeats fit better. That snare part has got to go man, playing eight sixteenth sixteenth over and over and over (and over) for the whole song is just... no. The tenor part you've got is pretty close to what they play in that video, I guess. Honestly, if you've got a cymbal line, just have the cymbals hold a ride for the snares and have the snares play on two and four, it's a rock song.

the mp3 problem might be mine. That one does not work for me either. What did you make that with?

(when I try and download it, the file size is ZERO)

Finale Prinmusic 2008 save as audio file mp3. The snare, I changes from a more complicated to that. I just wanted to hear it, but it turned out to be boring. I have been busy with a few other songs. I have several that COULD use some help.